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Singing sweet, soft melodies,
Muffled by the currents in my head.
The will to find the song is drowned
So words come out in screams.
The pressure of the water grows,
As I fall faster, deeper.
In this flooded, lonely room,
No one ever hears.
No tears to sting my eyes,
Only water crashing through broken mirrors.
My eyes begin to close
And I let the darkness blind me.
Now the liquid fills my lungs,
Collapsing bones and bruising heart,
No more life to pump the blood.
I truly miss my breathing.
The furnishings all drenched and old,
No one has lived here quite a while.
Doors sealed shut and windows barred,
Just letting in a pale blue light
That covers every patch of wall,
Seeping through spaces in the water.
Turquoise light radiates my body,
All left still and silent.
Eyes are closed
And heart subsided,
Floating in this sea of peace,
My raging mind now quiet.
Muffled by the currents in my head.
The will to find the song is drowned
So words come out in screams.
The pressure of the water grows,
As I fall faster, deeper.
In this flooded, lonely room,
No one ever hears.
No tears to sting my eyes,
Only water crashing through broken mirrors.
My eyes begin to close
And I let the darkness blind me.
Now the liquid fills my lungs,
Collapsing bones and bruising heart,
No more life to pump the blood.
I truly miss my breathing.
The furnishings all drenched and old,
No one has lived here quite a while.
Doors sealed shut and windows barred,
Just letting in a pale blue light
That covers every patch of wall,
Seeping through spaces in the water.
Turquoise light radiates my body,
All left still and silent.
Eyes are closed
And heart subsided,
Floating in this sea of peace,
My raging mind now quiet.
So I saw the picture above on Tumblr and I thought it was really cool. Shortly after, a poetry contest was announced through my club, but we needed something of inspiration to go along with it. So I came up with this today. I might use another poem I've already written though and find a picture that matches it somehow, but I'd really like to know what you think of this one and whether or not I should use it for the contest.
As for author's notes, I really took the time to make each line mean something important. Everything links back to the title or other parts of the poem in some way and I worked really hard at the imagery of the room and the water and the feeling of peace and what not. Please comment!!
I was inspired by this picture phoeberudomino.com/artwork/199… All credit goes to Phoebe Rudomino phoeberudomino.com/home.html I personally have email confirmation from the artist to use it as my preview picture
I encourage you to check out more of her work!
Edit as of 7/20/14: This poem was recently requested to be in a lot of up and coming groups so I thought I'd revisit it with the poetry skills I have gained and edit it. I think I enhanced it a lot. I will provide the original for comparison at a later date.
As for author's notes, I really took the time to make each line mean something important. Everything links back to the title or other parts of the poem in some way and I worked really hard at the imagery of the room and the water and the feeling of peace and what not. Please comment!!
I was inspired by this picture phoeberudomino.com/artwork/199… All credit goes to Phoebe Rudomino phoeberudomino.com/home.html I personally have email confirmation from the artist to use it as my preview picture
I encourage you to check out more of her work!Edit as of 7/20/14: This poem was recently requested to be in a lot of up and coming groups so I thought I'd revisit it with the poetry skills I have gained and edit it. I think I enhanced it a lot. I will provide the original for comparison at a later date.
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Poem is beautiful, picture is beautiful, ergo: YOU ARE GIFTED AND BEAUTIFUL