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The Ocean At Night

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No, I will go alone.
I will come back when it's over,
When tides recede, revealing
Footprints melted into sand,
Glistening white from rays of blue.
I long for the shine of shadow.

We must part ways,
Walk back toward houses
Where light bulbs flicker with guilt,
And sinks drip with secrets.
Lonely and quiet emptiness
Creates a home of memory.

I will come back when it's over,
The noises of splashes and screams quiet,
The sun's arrogance descended over the horizon.
I will return in silence and black,
Lulling waves to sleep, at last.
Together, we can be.
This was the first writing exercise done in my poetry class. The assignment was to pick from a list of couplets by famous writers and write the rest of the poem. When she handed back the assignment I found out that the one I had chosen was from The Concert by Millay. Other than the first 2 lines (and I suppose the repetition in the 3rd stanza) the rest of the poem is entirely my own. This surprisingly went through a lot of editing. She wrote a few comments that really helped me fix it since it was a quick writing assignment done during the last 15-20 min of class last week. I'm glad I sat down and revised it because it was pretty crappy. Now I actually like how it turned out. Feedback is appreciated!! :)
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bunocerous's avatar
Very nice imagery, I feel like it is talking about the end of a storm.